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The color of a rose is irrelevant
Because a rose just ends up dead
So let's skip the cheesy poetry
And get you the hell in my bed~
Here. My wonderful poem for The Valentines day project. Amazing.

Isn't it?

Don't worry. I have a longer shittier one for valentines day.


Now, let's get this orgy started.
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Critique by Ophiocordyceps Feb 11, 2012, 3:24:20 PM
You asked for a critique, so why not give you one?

The remarkable syntax and word choice of this compelling poem opens up the door to the soul of this artist, showing the world that this cheese loving girly man is not shy about his desires and entices the reader to follow him into the dark-- I mean follow him into the-- yes, into the dark where he promises unspeakable things. And the rhyming! It soothes the soul after the coarse language that is the word 'hell'. All in all this is truly a marvelous work of art.

...I live to annoy the hell out of you. ilu lulzy! :D
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ZAMGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SOOO KAAWAIIII DESSSUUUU!!! ^-^ Liek I'm cumming from all the sexinesss-chan desuuu!!!!!!
...Ah, what the fuck, misplaced fake weeaboon-ness :stare: That was a fail on my part. /shot

Anyways... LET ME IN ON THIS ORGY :eager: Because of this delightful poem, I won't even hesitate to get in your bed. I would take a giant dolphin dive in that mattress of cotton and hopefully not find Lego pieces hidden in it. Or better, instead of a bed, we can all have an orgy on top of the Empire State Building with flamingos. How does that sound?
Oh, and we can also write cheesy poetry in the bathroom of the opposite gender... We can write gay (as in cheerful) poetry on the mirrors~ 8DD And then take turns squirting ketchup and other shit on each others ass :eyes:
Good job on this poem, you make me so horny for dat orgy. :iconohohoplz:
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Fallenherosrevive Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2013  Student General Artist
XD Ha! I like how direct you are awesome poetry.
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Writing-Desk Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
That is the most demeaning thing I've ever heard? You are such a pig! No one is more sexist than you! How can people stand you? I mean women are not just toys that you can just go around checking off to your to do list, ya know. We have morals! And standards! We will not just jump in bed with just anyone! And ANOTHER THING-

...Oh, screw it. Why not? C;
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Poetgurl Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Bravo
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phoenixleo Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
I only clicked it because of the Rose in the title D:
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ValleyGirl13 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Best. Romantic. Poem. Ever. I love it. <3
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PanteraSunrise Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it. Straight to the point.
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Yukaharu Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Yep, I showed this to my co-worker today....it was my first day on the job and I used it as a humorous ice-breaker....he laughed so hard I thought he'd die. Thank you for making my first day of work amazing, Lulz! I lav you for everz and everz!!! *goes and crawls in bed and snuggles*
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Neko-Chan197 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I feel out of my seet laughing, :meow:
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DeathMonkeys Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
Yes. Just, yes.
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Kaleidoscopic365 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
And the award for most-well-thought-outbut-NyaNya wont-work pickup line goes to...
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cheesecake92 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it! Short and sweet and to the point.
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priteeboy Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Lol, I thought this was going to be depressing and Emo at first, then I got to the last bit :XD:

Yes the colour of a rose is irrelevant, to be honest - I've always liked those bi-coloured roses more than red ones :slow:
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Raveness13 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hahaha, I love how blunt you are. This is awesome.
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XhiseyesX Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
absolutely fabulous
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steph2013 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
So blunt. :D
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anyrandomfandom Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aight. Let's fuck.
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camptodactyliac Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hahaha, i love this one :heart:
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heoile Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazing indeed xD ^^
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lovinthevamps Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
now that just made my day XD
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Enderkichi Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
Brilliant! :'DDDDD
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X-ArtSmartElli-X Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Original, and to the point. I love it. Lol. :)
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DAnnsCreations Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
:giggle: My husband is going to LOVE this!! :rofl: He never gives flowers as a gift, he considers it wrong to cut a flower, why not just look at them, smell them and be content that something soo beautiful can exist in this crazy world! Why destroy them in the prime of their life? :rose: Hope you have a fantastic Valentines Day!! :blowkiss: :iconlovehug:
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blueheron93 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student Writer
I feel the same way. Living flowes FTW.
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priteeboy Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I feel the same way. Well, I'm not "against" cutting flowers, but I like seeing them in the garden more than in a vase - they last longer when still attached to the plant :XD:
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DAnnsCreations Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
:icongivemesmilesplz: :iconpurpleheartsplz: :huggle:
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MercyBringingAngel Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so Romantic! I'm sure anyone would faal for that! :nana: But really, this is so funny! LMFAO!
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imtheguywhocolors Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
This is fantastic. XD
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earthgoddess11 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
this is great if I ever get a boyfriend I'm gonna show him this card
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m3-rulz Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LMFAO!!! love it!!
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MJisAWESOME Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Looooollll This made me laugh. Epicness!! xD
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Malcolm-et-Amis Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Love it XD
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ValkyrieSkul Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Lol!
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Kirky98 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
haha LOL :D
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BlueLightningStrike Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
Hahahaha. XD
Very nice!
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gold-rose Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
great piece :thumbsup: :lol:
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Spoxie Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
~ Beautiful! ~ :heart:
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Illuminati-genius Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Student General Artist
so short yet so amazing :XD: funny aswell
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ladyelva Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
holy shit, blunt much? XD
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GDeyke Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012   Writer
I'm speechless. :XD: This is amazing.
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Shion-x-Yiyi Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
SO ROMANTIC
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Psycho-Schematics Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Student General Artist
My body is ready
jk
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GemmyD Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
I could use this ^^ Well, if I wasn't forever alone that is. :iconmiseryplz:
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immadinorawr Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
So beautiful! :iconsobeautifulplz:
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Pemphredo Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It... is... beautiful!! :iconhappytearsplz:
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SerFrea Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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This is one of the deepest poems I've ever read from you lulzy. :|
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cdie509 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
haha love it
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haniipop Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Genius. (o u o)
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Zoey2070 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
That is amazing.
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twinone99 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Great...
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Nene-chan612 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2012
The true reason for valentine's day, well done sir.
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